This is what you shall do: Love the earth and sun and the animals, despise riches, give alms to every one that asks, stand up for the stupid and crazy, devote your income and labor to others, hate tyrants, argue not concerning God, have patience and indulgence toward the people...Re-examine all you have been told at school or church or in any book, dismiss what insults your very soul, and your very flesh shall become a great poem.
Walt Whitman

Venice 2010, J.G.

Friday, October 29, 2010

Walking to Frenchmen

The IHOP manager on Canal accosts Kyle and Amy, one of his visiting friends from Kentucky after they use the bathroom. They aren’t paying customers. I watch the altercation through the window, and after buying a water, I return outside and the two other Kentucky girls have found conversation with two obese middle-aged guys from out of town. I stand a few feet down, embarrassed by the whole group. The two walk out of IHOP with giant plastic to-go cups of Coke. Amy is wearing a red, short-sleeved sweater with a pocket. Kyle shoves his Coke in this pocket and Amy is already holding her own as well as a liter of soda from the dorm that someone forgot to mix with whisky. The travelers brought Old Crow and Southern Comfort and everyone learned in the common room that the later is from New Orleans. I call the group together and lead us down Bourbon. Who invited all of these people and why are they wearing Mardi Gras beads? Bright lights do attract the inebriated. I weave between people, get bumped, and turn back to see the revelers who echo the choruses of classic rock songs blaring from some daiquiri shop. After St. Ann where some consider the gay clubs, I charge on and the party fades behind us. We encounter a street band, and we pet their dogs. They don’t look too unhealthy and I wonder if the kids have a Daddy’s credit  card in case the charade gets old. But their song is sweet. He sits on a stoop, leans back on a blue shutter and plucks his banjo. We all join in, stomp the concrete, clap, riff on the vocals as background singers. The musician offers his hot and I drop a wrinkled dollar. Kyle gives him a few pinches of tobacco. They tell us their name and where they will soon play, but no one remembers. We are almost to Frenchmen Street, and the wind of the sudden cold front pushes us down the sidewalk.

3 comments:

  1. Haha Glad to know how you guys' night went after you left the dorms.
    You've got some good, active inebriated characters that I'd like to know more about. More described interaction between themselves and other people would help.
    Also, its a strong scene, but I'm looking for a sense of purpose. What stuck out to you about this event and made you want to write it down?

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  2. This is really funny because of the details. The fact that the men that they're talking to are obese and middle aged, the generic affect of the scene taking place around an ihop etc. I think that past tense would work better here because of this as present kind of takes focus away from the details, making them seem like after thoughts.

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  3. The scene and use of imagery and vibrant throuhgout the piece. It allows one to really feel as though he/she encountered the event or was there in the group. It feels like a vivid memory but possibly with a longer story to ensue.

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